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I decided to the first full artwork of my Rylynn, and well... I don't really like it very much. To be precise, I kinda hate it. It's yucky. I think poor Ry looks like a mole :XD: needed to upload it, though, as the BG's okay, and I like the theme. plus, I really want to check this new submit page of dA. it looks like a total crap to me as for now, but maybe I'll get used to it someday...

okay, have some writing in addition to this. if you see any mistakes, point them out. English is not my native lanuage after all c: and you know what... I like this text much more than the picture. I actually trembled while writing it, and it wasn't because if the temperature I think.

Rylynn was coming back to the Eden at night after going out to the Wastelands to get some space- which wasn't a very clever thing to do. But he was strong, experienced and big- and he was still alive after so many trips. That meant he felt somehow immortal, and even if he died... Well, he'd be dead.
When he came to the entrance, he nodded to the Gate Guard who let him out. Such a good youngster he was! But now, the black mutt noticed, despite the guard wearing his mask, he looked somehow uneasy.
"Rylynn..."- he started, looking at his forpaws after the Mapper gave him this infamous drilling gaze of his, also visible through the mask. "Star's out there".
"What?"- the black dog asked when he heard his mate's name, in a voice that wasn't very loud, nor filled with emotions, but a wrath and coldness could be heard in it.
"She said she was going after you, she begged me and threatened me to let her go, and finally just... escaped. I had no chance to catch her!"
"Perhaps you hadn't"- Rylynn snapped, looking at the thickset youngster, a massive heap of muscle. He made a few steps backwards, just to take a look at the ground. The earth was hard here, so there were no pawsteps visible.
"You should have sent someone after her, fool! Which way did she go?!"
Casting the last furious glance at the guard who pointed his muzzle in to the west, Rylynn turned around and bounded away. He tried to scent the sable and white bitch, but it was rather useless in his mask.

He spent hours looking for her. "Why, Star, why did you go after me? What was that couldn't wait till I come back? How could you do such a reckless thing, dear, how could you?!", his mind was screaming, while on the outside, he looked serious and concentrated as always. He'd never been more aware of his own feelings. Always rather dull, always above everything. Now he felt fear and guilt. "I have to find you". The night was really cold and dark. "Oh, come on, comeon, comeoncomeoncomeon!". On the east, he noticed, the sky was turning a graphite-grey shade instead of inky black, and the stars were disappearing, just as Star had.

"There you are!", he shouted when he saw a white-and-red bundle on the ground some metres ahead. "I've been dying of worry, Star. Come to me, Star. Such a silly thing you'd done... to go out and take a nap? Come on..."
He wasn't feeling the scent of blood just yet.

When he came closer, he saw the first crimson spots marking his mate's fur. He thought she must have got attacked and hit unconscious, so he sprinted towads her, suddenly losing the feeling of pain in his paws that'd been caused by what must have been 8 hours of walking. When he bent his head over her, he noticed there was more blood than he'd thought- the red fur of Star's and the dust have camouflaged it perfectly. And one more thing...

She wasn't breathing.

At first he took off his mask and put her body on his back- how terrifying, it felt like she was already getting stiffer, but it must have been his imagination! "That's all my fault. Why you're unconscious?! I have to carry you back to the eden, Star. The Physicians will help you, Star!", he thought in deep shock. He walked like this for some time, until he suddenly felt terrible ache in his paws. The muscles were really tired and the pawpads were scratched by sand. And with the feeling of pain, another realization came ofer him... that Star was dead. He laid her on the ground and mourned quietly over her body. He wanted to howl, but it would just bring the Wastelanders there, so he had to keep himself silent. The sky was already bright. Thanks to the milky sun, Star's fur was glowing despite the dust covering it...




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:iconwolfkidz:
This picture is very nice. I love the way you made the dark colored dog. his expression looks almost full of regret as well as sorrow. The dog lying on the ground is much smaller then the other and makes it seem...more real. I also like how the larger dog has scratches all over his legs. It makes it seem like he was fighting before the dog died. I also like the sand everywhere, it really pulls in the dark colored sky. The two trees in the background also give a nice effect. I love your art and I'm looking for ward to seeing more of it! Thank you for reading.

This is a truly amazing piece.

~Rattata of Wolfkidz
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quloxi Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
mamy piasek. pustynię. i wiatr (o czym świadczy pył unoszący się w powietrzu). 
piasek jest sypki, a wiatr tym bardziej porusza jego powierzchnią - logicznym jest więc, że leżąca postać i łapy stojącej powinny być w pewnym stopniu podsypane piaskiem na minimum kilka centymetrów, bo bez tego postacie zbyt odcinają się od tła. 
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blackunia Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
właśnie już po wrzuceniu obrazka zdałam sobie sprawę że zapomniałam dorobić warstwy z piaskiem "na nich", a potem nie chciało mi się już w tym dłubać xD
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Kitka Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
jak super Ci wychodzi oddawanie emocji na obrazkach...
i to tło... niby tylko pustynia ale taką pustynie też tak świetnie trzeba umieć narysować, bardzo mi sie podoba x]
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
awww, dzięki c: nigdy chyba nie malowałam pustyni, ale dość łatwo poszło!
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Sargeant-Knoxx Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ah! Didn't realize this was for Their Dark Eden until I read the description. So cool.
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hah, thanks!
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KrnabrnaDusza Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Jakie boskie.oomggg<33 :la:
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Tree-Branch Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow this looks simply amazing! I love the detail you added in the background and the the faze of the wind and such! His expression is just heart wrenching especially after you read the story :c Amazing job though! I just wanna give Rylynn a hug!
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks a lot! I'm actually not very pleased with this artwork, but I'm glad you do like it <3
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SmexyHajiSan Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Gotye isn't the best when it comes to catching little, fast things...


Poor Ry... His mate looked very cute.

Sad story is said...
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Star used to be just like her name would suggest, small and bright. too good for Rylynn. it just had to end like this.
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SmexyHajiSan Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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Falconicide Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Poor Ry is just asking for the infection by taking that mask off. XD
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I know it all right! xD especially because Star just must have been killed by the infected dogs...

could you tell me how many skelts will it give him? I'm not sure if 20's the right amount...
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Falconicide Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student Digital Artist
it's 20 if it's got a story /rp snippet in the artist comments. 15 if just the pic <3
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
that's what I thought. okay then, thanks a lot c:
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SilesiaAirKennels Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
ładne, ale... nie rozumiem cieniowania Rylynna xD
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
daj spokój, on cały wygląda paskudnie |D
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SneakyNannon Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
I like the picture and the story to go with it is sad
<3 nice work
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks a lot c:
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Sorchia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
Nie rozumiem, czemu wszyscy narzekają na tą nową stronę do uploadowania D: Jedyne zastrzeżenie, jakie mam, to kolor, powinna być lekko zielona jak reszta strony, ale wszystko inne jest... fajne. Proste i czytelne, bez zbędnych komplikacji. Co prawda już się przyzwyczaiłam, bo miałam ją od dłuższego czasu, ale nawet w pierwszej chwili mnie nie odrzuciła. Tylko dziwne, że jest w stylu stasha, jakby chcieli jakoś rozgraniczyć te dwie "podstrony"...

Co do rysunku: świetna atmosfera i klimat <3 i zgranie postaci z tłem. W anatomii Rylynna coś mi nie gra z barkiem i łapą, cieniowanie też jest nieco dziwne- wygląda, jakby światło padało z prawej sądząc po grzbiecie i łapach, ale jednocześnie... jakby z przodu, ale wtedy powinien być chyba cień za uchem i brak światła na zadzie D: albo mi się tyko wydaje. Może się nie znam.
Urzekło mnie też klapnięte ucho Star.
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nuhhh, ja jakoś wolałam starą. Jej główną zaletą było to, że mogłaś załadować obrazek i już tam czekał, nawet jak wyłączyłaś okno. I wydaje mi się że stara strona była "lżejsza" dla systemu.

to cieniowanie to w ogóle jest totalna porażka :< chyba w wolnej chwili przysiądę i je zrobie całkiem od nowa, bo jest chyba główną przyczyną dla której Rylynn wygląda jak kret. bez cieniowania jakoś mniej kretowato się prezentował |D
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Sorchia Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
Ah. Nie wiem, zawsze od razu wrzucałam całość, ale chyba i tak jest automatyczny zapis, nie? o.o
Lżejsza to na pewno, bo żadnych bajerów typu przeciągnij i upuść nie było... xD


Mnie kreta tak czy siak nie przypomina tak bardzo C:
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scarlet-pikachu Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
The shading and detail is stunning, I really love the emotion here as well.
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thank you a lot! :meow:
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scarlet-pikachu Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013
You're most welcome.
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Tuffysgirl Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Here Comes Goodbye by Rascal Flatts came on my pandora station once I started reading this...

It's really good! The only thing you might want to look at - "You should have sent someone after her, fool! Which way she went?!" - the last part should be something like "which way did she go?"

But other than that it was really good, and definitely emotional. I don't know the whole story, so maybe it didn't impact me as much as it would someone who knows the whole thing, but I still felt Rylynn's emotions :)
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I actually wrote "did she go" at first, but I felt like "went" would suit the situation with its carelessness... I will correct it as you say, though. thanks ;)

the whole story still isn't created, you just need to know that Rylynn is generally a stoic, a solitary and reserved person who'd scarcely shown any emotions even towards Star herself. and that's why she went after him when he left for a walk without saying a word- again! she'd had enough of the discance he kept.

thank you a lot! :heart:
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Tuffysgirl Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh, okay, haha :)

Okay then! Yeah, that did come across ^_^

No problem! <3
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xsiggix Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:,(
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blackunia Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
;_;
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xsiggix Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
>_< (Emotional) sorry im still not so good to this
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